1. I think that my pontification on chocolate chip cookies in general turned out pretty good, but my paper was very lacking on concrete comparisons and exposition about the cookies themselves. I would go through my notes and add more of my observations.
2. The feedback showed that I needed more exposition on the cookies and better transitions. The second half of my essay was underdeveloped.
3. I will add transitions and compare the cookies to each other more. I will also go through all five senses for each cookie.
4. I had a good tone and a good setup/introduction. They thought everything on paper was pretty good, there just was not enough.
5. I learned how important notes were. If we do another similar activity, I will make better notes and make better use of them when I move on to the writing stage.
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